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I do my laundry across the street
from the bookstore, and while I wait,
I try to read through the windows.

There’s a book signing today
by Joey’s favorite author. He poses
near the window like a movie preview,
waiting for people to remember his name.
Joey says he’s famous for his handwriting
and he is practicing on the back of a napkin.
When Joey’s bored,
he tries writing quotes on his arm
because it’s more authentic.

I’m washing the sweatshirt
Joey lent to me when we walked
over the Brooklyn Bridge. When he spoke,
he created platforms with his hands
and echoed like he was in a bandshell.
We stopped to watch other people cross
and Joey stood like a character in a novel,
leaning over the side.
Strangers blew his words away with
crowded minivans
and trucks with epitaphs painted
over their logos. His hair
landed like an invitation. I came to see,
peeking between him
The wind made me shiver

and Joey pushed his sweatshirt over me.
I put my hands into his pockets
and he somehow held me.
©2008-2009 ~cynicalxpoet
:iconcynicalxpoet:

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Suggestions/comments are always welcomed.
(>_< This is sappy.)

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:iconr-mitchell:
not sappy... it's really well narrated, with strong voice and some beautiful imagery ("Joey created platforms with his hands and echoed like he was in a bandshell." is one of my favourites). i like how it takes a while for the reader to realise what is going on, there is a really pleasant build-up to the piece, and the last stanza really grabs you, it's so intimate and precious.
nice work :)
:iconcynicalxpoet:
Thank you! ^_^ That was a very in-depth compliment xD
:iconestallidos:
the ending is perfectly poignant.
the idea of joey makes me feel warm.
or safe.
or something.
:iconcynicalxpoet:
Thanks. I was worried about it.
^_^ I was sorta thinking about that when I wrote it.
:iconeruiluvatar:
i agree with estallidos, i got a similar feeling. very well written.

--
"The difference between a bad artist and a good one is: the bad artist only seems to copy a great deal; the good one really does."-William Blake
:iconcynicalxpoet:
Thank you! ^^ (For the fave, as well)
:iconrevolutionnairerouge:
I absolutely love your work. It's very well imagined, very real, and full of excellent imagery. I love how smoothly your ideas and images flow. It's like I know the characters personally.

Brilliant!

--
"They turn over their little purple moonlight pages, in which their secret naked doodlings do show..."
:iconcynicalxpoet:
...thank you! I'm so glad you think that ^_^

x)
:iconb1gfan:
:D an honest moment with all it's honest feelings - what's sappy about that?

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