We write our names on brick walls
and on the sides of bus stations so
they might go somewhere
and we wait for someone to remember us.
We turn on the radio to listen to this guy
who was famous by the time he was fourteen
My friend thinks hes sexy
and closes her eyes in the back
of my mothers car when she hears his voice
But he makes me step out of myself
like hes a lesson in how to be better and
all I can do is listen. I try to leave fingerprints
on my hands
He is singing about being left behind
but you cant be abandoned if
you havent been found. Its dark
but I can see us on the windshield like
weve hit it. My friend is shivering and
she doesnt notice because shes
pretending to move somewhere else.
I tell her that I cant wait to learn
how to drive, but I dont
know where to go. I want to drag our names
through everywhere and leave people
remembering what our handwriting looks like
When the song ends, we
lift ourselves into the driveway,
opening the gate like its monumental
and mumble new names for each other.














Comments
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Me: I would be terrified if someone asked me to make a family tree.
Me: and all the cousins I mean? that's JUST my mother's side.
<annika235>that wouldnt be a tree
<annika235>it's a FOREST
"we wait for someone to remember us."
"but you cant be abandoned if
you havent been found"
I love this.
"I tell her that I cant wait to learn
how to drive, but I dont
know where to go."
i really love those lines, they seem to capture the feeling of the piece and present it in such a simple yet striking manner. gorgeous.
Thank youuuu.
Thank you ^_^ That's what I was hoping!
I definitely love the poem though.
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Me: I would be terrified if someone asked me to make a family tree.
Me: and all the cousins I mean? that's JUST my mother's side.
<annika235>that wouldnt be a tree
<annika235>it's a FOREST
and on the sides of bus stations so
they might go somewhere
and we wait for someone to remember us
A great start that really developed well as the poem went on
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