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My sweatshirt is too tight... by ~cynicalxpoet:iconcynicalxpoet:



1.
My sweatshirt is too tight,
and I pull the fabric away from my arms
like fatty skin.

2.
We’re walking across the
football field, and Diane’s shoelaces
drag mud across her ankles. When
she tells stories it feels like she’s living

inside of everyone else, giving them reasons
and inhaling the way they eat, the way
their hair hangs.
I’m too scared to ask her why,
because she might forget how to do it.

1.
It’s too warm for my sweatshirt and
I let it twist behind my waist, the empty sleeves
reaching toward my pockets. Diane
unbuttons her peacoat and
ask me if I want to talk, nodding
as if she wants to help me.
I let her think I didn’t hear.

2.
We stop at her house
and watch while the sun touches
the parked cars on its way down. The clouds
look like a city and I imagine
that she’s there, telling a story about herself
standing against the telephone pole.
I sit on the grass and ask if
she can see it, pointing with my bare
fingernail.

3.
I think she’ll be confused, but
she smiles like she’s learning
something about me and says “thanks”.
Her coat and my jacket sit next
to each other near the curb.
My palms press against the grass, and Diane’s
back grows into the wood, her
eyelashes framing her face
while she squints at who I think she is.
©2009 ~cynicalxpoet
:iconcynicalxpoet:

Author's Comments

This needs a title... suggestions would be great.
Any suggestions are always welcome 8D

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:iconariesaurus:
you, my friend, are a cockroach

<3 archy for life

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"Nobody listens any more! I can't talk to the walls because they're yelling at ME. I can't talk to my wife; she listens to the WALLS."
-Fahrenheit 451
the temperature at which books burn
:icondystopiaalight:
This is nice. I think I know who it is and if so, it fits the person. This is pedantic of me, but in
"Her coat and my jacket sit next
to each other next to the curb."
the word next is bothering me...
The numbering is also interesting. Is it like two parts?
:iconcynicalxpoet:
Thanks!
Orly? Give me initials 8D
Yeah, you're right. I'll change it. (Thanks!)

Yeah... it's sort of like the two of us separately, but then we combine at the end.
:icondystopiaalight:
Well, these sort of could be lots of people's initials, but: A.B.?
:D That a cool idea with the numbering. Never would've thought of something like that.
:iconcynicalxpoet:
Yep! You win a scallion pancake. ^_^
It was a result of my mom telling me that the focus kept switching around, so I just decided to number it.
:iconiamphoenixmoth:
I LOVE YOUR SIGNATURE.

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Me(E): you are a dreamcrusher, Alex. A brilliant one, but a dreamcrusher.
A: haha
E: you are, sir. I should go dig up Langston Hughes and tell him that.
A: you should
E: "What happens to a dream deferred?" "It gets stomped on by Alex."
:iconiamphoenixmoth:
I love the stories you tell.

--
Me(E): you are a dreamcrusher, Alex. A brilliant one, but a dreamcrusher.
A: haha
E: you are, sir. I should go dig up Langston Hughes and tell him that.
A: you should
E: "What happens to a dream deferred?" "It gets stomped on by Alex."

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